Comments : End Of Eternity

  • 18 years ago

    by purva bhatia

    Look at that man pretending to be so nice
    with all that fake smile all around his face
    and the tears he hides paying the price
    for it seems as if he has lost his life's race

    -somewhere this man thrives in every soul....

    wonderfully written!

    regards
    purva

  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    Wow! This has a lot of very deep feelings. Excellent job and word choice. The reader can feel the sadness dripping from your words! Great job! Bravo!

  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    Excellent job on this poem. Loved the word choices.

    if life is meant to breakdown
    then forever let my knees kiss the ground
    if from me love is all you expect
    then wail till silent agony makes a sound

    This stanza was really great!
    Love your friend Cindy

  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    Nitin
    This poem is so heart wrenching. It is so nice to know how much things have changed.

    Did you notice that man with a bleeding chest?
    seems as if he is searching for something somewhere
    digging inside his own flesh to find the remaining best
    of the words he ever uttered as his last prayer

    Such a vivid image this portrays.
    Excellent job!
    Love Cindy