Comments : Sleep With One Eye Open

  • 15 years ago

    by AngelicDecadence

    Hello world
    Don't you think that it is over
    ^In this place, "it's" seems better then it and is separated, it causes for an unnecessary pause.
    Now that you sleep with one eye open
    All the stuff you use to trust
    Has lead you the wrong way
    ^Lead should be Led.

    Goodbye now
    Don't you think maybe somehow
    The earth is not really round
    It just looks that way so they could say
    That you were wrong again

    (Chorus)
    I reach out just grab my hand
    You just just push it back
    Think it's it's my attack
    I help out when you want
    So never that's what you got
    You must have just forgotten

    Just please
    You've got me down on my knees
    Whisper with wind the trees
    ^I think it might sound better like so: "Whisper with the wind, the trees"
    Here my name am I insane
    Or just thinking of life

    No difference
    This relaxation is to intense
    Don't worry it's my expense
    No need to worry about the blurry
    Their wounds will heal in time

    (Chorus)
    I reach out just grab my hand
    You just just push it back
    Think it's it's my attack
    ^I loved this part before, and I love it again. The way this would be sung would be wonderful. Beautifully created. :]
    I help out when you want
    So never that's what you got
    You must have just forgotten

    Hello reaper
    Are my memories real keepers
    Or did I live my life in the deep end
    Unaware I'm out of air
    And drowning in misery

    (Chorus)
    I reach out just grab my hand
    You just just push it back
    Think it's it's my attack
    I help out when you want
    So never that's what you got
    You must have just forgotten

    Simply fa nominal. I'm so intrigued by your work now. :] Amazing job. They seem to just get better and better as I go along.