Nice

Your lyrics brought tears to my eyes its amazing you wrote exactly how i feel at this moment. i broke up with my boyfriend ten months ago. i was with him for seven years. thanks for writing keep it up

Me likey ;) I love lyrics, and I hope to hear this on the radio someday to as beautiful tone as the lyrics are

I'm curious as to what sort of music would go along with it, but I thought the lyrics were well done (though it can be hard to tell if you can't hear them sung).

Very powerful and emotional. I'd like to hear this song, its very well written with such an immense vibe to it

Sondos

This is seriously a great poem. It shows vunerability and weakness.

[PygmyPuff]

GREAT work!! 5/5

Wow, man i hope you become a singer, cause i could listen to that everyday on the radio.

This one was very good.. Keep it up..

Wow...i loved it...i wish i knew how the tune goes...it'll make a wonderful song.

I agree with Sean, what kind of music would go with this lyrics?.. are you in some sort of band, or a solo artist?..

Well written....no doubt!!!!

Beautifully Written:D This Was An Amazing Poem/Song! I Enjoyed It A Lot! As I Can See Your A Very Talented Writer! 5/5 amazing brilliant poem
♥
Steph

Aww.. that was very sad.. i kept hoping he would come back and then he didnt and im like.. nooo.. lol.. the flow on this was a bit jerky at times but all in all it was good.. the descriptions could be improved if you wanted to.. but the emotion was strong and clear..

An left me here all alone, all alone.
^ should be "and" or "an'"

nice job! 4/5 keep up the good work!

I wonder what it would sound like with music, hmmm. Anyways, I really liked it.

Good poem slash song! It flowed nicely......you don't happen to play music too??

Beautifully executed and very original, yet still quite easy to relate to. Perfectly written lyrics. This couldn't have been better... Unless, of course, there was music. This could easily be a good song -- almost like something you'd hear at Warped Tour. You might want to look into getting someone in a band to work on making it a finished piece for you, like I've done with some of my lyrics.

All else aside, you write very well and have a nice style and sense of word use and flow. I look forward to seeing more of your work.

As always~ Kate

I like thiss alot...you have alot of sad poems but they ofcourse are very stron and powerful I like your style.Keep writing.
5/5

Chris

I loved it....im adding u 2 my faves list. i love ur work! mostly cause i realate to pretty much everything u write....

This is a great song. It sounds like something I would have just written recently. 5/5