Wow that is..That is so..intesnse honestly. I love your poetry. You earned a spor in my favorites. And not alot of people get in my favorites.
♥ Megan

That sounds like a really messed up dream man. The flow and rhymes were good in this poem. You left a lot of room for the imagination, especially the battle scene. I saw it playing in my mind. Really weird reading this poem though, I had a messed up 'nightmare' last night. lol anyways awesome stuff man.

Again a very nice poem. I did howver give you a four because there were a few imperfections. First of all the spelling and grammer; stanza 2 line three it is spelt thrown and stanza 6 line 3 you've written WE instead of We. No big deal just thought I'd let you know. Now the reason I gave you a 4 not a 5 I felt that some of the rhymes were a bit forced i.e. stanza 3 'drink it' and 'admit'. And the rhythm is a bit unsteady but apart from that you have a very good poem.
Keep it up
Aaron (remo)

That's a creepy dream, but it made a pretty good poem

"I'm on death roll,"
What is death roll? Death row?
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"I get trowen against the bars,"
thrown was spelt incorrectly
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"And what I saw,
I would never tell."
Really? It seems like you go right on to tell about it anyway. I'd change the line to actually make sense.
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"I long for death, I tell him.
And he stands there silent."
How can you long for death when you already died and went to Hell?
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Interesting dream, and neat storyline. The rhyming was pretty well done, though I thought there was an absence of a strong rhythm in the poem, and some of the things were described more blatantly than I would have liked.

Wow.. that was a pretty intense dream. I liked the poem though. It was really good. Nice job.