Visions of a Sky

Wow that was really beautiful! I loved the imagery! The descriptions were so vivid. Good job!

"The heavens were in a brite glow."
'bright' was spelled incorrectly
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Okay, your poem was very good except for one thing:

You said 'clouds' too much. Be more symbolic and creative with that! You almost did it in one line, but you gave in:
"Pillow like clouds hover over the Golden peaks."
Why say Pillow-like? Why not:
"Fluffy pilows hover over the Golden peaks"

People aren't dumb, they're going to know that you're not talking about actual pillows, so you shouldn't be afraid about using some symbolism! Try to find a way so you only use the word 'cloud' once in your poem, figure out metaphors and symbols that will give credit to the readers, and make them feel like they actually did some thinking.

I liked the imagery in the poem, and the ending wrapped things up nicely.

That was a beautiful poem. you described it so vividly. i could picture it in my mind clearly

Some of the imagery here was really nice especially
'The cool air licks my cheeks.
Royal clouds smother the hills.'

This was beuatiful however I only gave you a 4/5 because although some of the imagary was nice I felt that there was a little too much, it seemed almost clogged up.
I feel that one really clear picture is better than 10 clear pictures.
Aaron (remo)

Wow.. that was so beautiful.. this poem had such a good description and flow! and great imagery! these were the only mistakes i could find ::

The heavens were in a brite glow.
^ here, i think you meant to write "bright" not "brite"

and

Pillow like clouds hover over the Golden peaks.
^ wasn't sure if it was meant to be like this, but i dont think golden should be capitalized..

great poem! really loved it! 5/5