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Omg, First I wanna say I pray to god this isn't true. This was really really good. There was so much emotion in this. And it was really sad. My mouth has dropped, I don't know what to say. This was 10000000% awesome. Really loved it. 5/5

`Taleee xx

Aww.. that was so sad and very heartfelt. I'm sorry if this is true. You did a great job on describing everything and it was filled with so much emotion. I love the part: "His pupils are whirling around
In his crazy eyes
And his face is a stunning purple "
Great imagery. You did a really good job on this. I hope it's not true. 5/5**

That was very sad, but as there isn't a consistent structure it's slightly difficult to read. I think that a better pattern would make the poem more powerful. Good work though x

Such a strond and awfully sad poem! great work! keep it up

Great peice, very well put together and written. really hope it is not true.

you wrote it very strongly with clear content and a lot of feeling.

5/5

Awww this is such a sad story. I have a friend who wrote one like this, about abusive parents, and that poem went on to do wonders. This one is just as great, and I hope everyone gets a chance to read. Awesome stuff!

Wow, that was purely Amazing Jessy. I really enjoyed reading that. It's rather sad though, but I enjoyed it. Great Job. :)

I loved the whole poem, your description of your hiding place was excellent, and the story was really sad and somehow scary.

Great job!
5/5

Wow this is very good i like it a lot. you are so talented. i really like your poems so i'm adding you to my favorites. 5/5

Wow.. you are such an amazing writer!
i really cant believe how wonderfully you put your emotions into words!
(and i really hope that everything is okay in your life now.)

"No, daddy, please?
I wail, frozen with fear.."
I think you should have quotation marks around 'no, daddy, please?'. and I'm not sure if I'd use a question mark instead of an exclamation mark.

"Leave her alone!
Don't you dare touch her!"
I'd also put those in quotation marks.

Good poem, very emotionally wrenching, and pretty difficult to read, especially the last stanza.

Thnx 4 entering my contest! anyway..wow so much detail..lol i think i read this in a contest u enterd? anyway...gr8 work...5/5
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Thats sooo sad! I feel like crying.... I can't express how nice you made this poem! It was perfect and really kept my attention... My only suggestion is in a few places you flow gets thrown off because your getting a little to wordy with filler words. But overall your an amazing writter and this was an amazing write! Keep writting or I'll be very upset with nothing from you to read!

This is really sad!!!
i liked it though!

WOW!! This is good...I really liked it...

Omg that is soo sad... i hope that its not true... but anyways its a GREAT poem and i really like.. even tho its really sad!!!
~kayla

I will never understand how some people can live with themselves after they have sunk so low as to abuse sweet children. How can they dare to get drunk off their a** when they know they become horrible people under the influence. I wish I could kill them myself before the harmed such sweet inoccent people. This subject is very dear to me, thank you for writing.

-Tainted

This is all too familiar for me. It brings back memories of my past. My dad used to beat me too... I still don't understand why he ever did. He's in jail now... he doesn't scare me anymore. But if this is actually true... you have to get help. He can't keep doing this to you and your mom. I lived with it for a really long time. Good luck... I'm here if you need to talk.

~ Tina

This sparked a tear... if that is the right word to use.. wow I couldn't even imagine anything like that.. I'm speechless right now. I hope it's not true. I do like the symbolism and the meaning behind the hidding place. Great job