Oh wow, excellent job of imagery and very well written. I really like your poems, they say the things that i can not myself. 5/5 :)
-Jenna xo

Wow. That was sad. Good poem though. Could relate in parts. The flow and rhyming were good. But I loved these lines;
"Cannot sleep
Cannot think
As into darkness
I begin to sink"

Awesome job! 5/5

.x.TaLeEe.x.

Yo!
Lol, This was a great poem. I'm loving the speed of it and how the sentences weren't dragged out. I'm a fan of this type of poetry that you can have a flow to reading it!
Your word usage was mmmkay and your flow as always rocked. I could see this becoming a song if more was added :P
Well done though, I enjoyed it. :]