This was awesome!

"Far from crystal waters
and my home
of harmonic laughter"

I really liked those lines. I don't really understand what this poem is about, though. Is it about hell, or something else?

Either way, it was very good! I like it a lot.
Take Care and God Blessm
Sarah-Joy

I really enjoyed this one Ms. Holly, I could never write one of these probably, but I love reading them. Great work, Love, Tim

You could call "Ever after" or Hopeless Path", those 2 would be good...this is a really well written poem. I loved it.

Holly! read. reread. read. reread..that's all i've been doing to this piece of work. It is outstanding. your poetic prowess is at its best and the parallel threads that run through the poem stand out starkly.

well done.

good luck and peace
shobhana

This poem is just great! Each stanza just adds more and more to this dark world of yours. My personal favorite is stanza one...particularly "I'm addicted to the ebony decay of a dead rose." Such a simple line, yet it seems to hold so much meaning. I'm trying to think of a title, but I can't seem to come up with one...what about..."Cradling a Wilted Rose?" Hmm...I don't know...

Good write!

Wow, this is so chilling, Holly... The flow to your poetry is just magical. The second stanza is my favorite, but the ending is incredible!

"of an unjustifiable
diabolic-ever after"
I love the wording here, amazing!

Great job Holly. I really liked this poem. As for a title i thinkits ok. Firey depths would also be good. Great job 5/5 Loretta

I really enjoyed this piece,
"Littered with hopelessness and crimson words of shattered love As the black vultures gaze solemnly from the wilted trees above"
Great imagery! I think the last sentence would be a good title.

Dark delight ? you are an incredible writter , maybe the title doesnt need changing another 5/5 from me