Wow! that was EXCELLENT! i could really feel the pain and fear.. that was so much better than my poem! lol.. the rhyme scheme was perfect, the descriptions were very detailed, and the emotion was all there! there were a few little site errors, but you can fix those! all in all, brilliant write! really enjoyed reading this! 5/5

The pain still remains
The fear is here to stay.
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I loved those last two lines, And I can relate heaps to them. Really awesome poem. It was sad, But really good! && thanks for the honest comment =] 5/5

`Taleee xx

Holy moly, very well penned poem. You did an excellent job of portraying your emotions. I felt like i was there with you and i could see it all happening, very deep but yet so full of meaning. Hope you feel better. 5/5 :)
-Jenna xo

Excellent. So descriptive and well expressed. An atmospheric and effective poem, well done =)

God bless,
-Elysium.

WOW that was a very good poem.
If that really happened to you I'm sorry that your childhood was so dark. I ahve a son, He's just 11 months and I vow to him, to his family and now to you that I will do all I can in my power to make sure his childhood is what your's should have been. Happy, safe, and nurturing. I'm sorry but you are very talented and you should publish your stuff. You could help people that are going through what you did. Thanks for looking at my poem look at some of my other stuff and let me know what you think. And you can be honest with me cause I like honesty.

Take care,
Cathy

WOW that was a very good poem.
If that really happened to you I'm sorry that your childhood was so dark. I ahve a son, He's just 11 months and I vow to him, to his family and now to you that I will do all I can in my power to make sure his childhood is what your's should have been. Happy, safe, and nurturing. I'm sorry but you are very talented and you should publish your stuff. You could help people that are going through what you did. Thanks for looking at my poem look at some of my other stuff and let me know what you think. And you can be honest with me cause I like honesty.

Take care,
Cathy

Wow that was an amazing poem-- you expressed the emotions really well and im sorry for all your pain--great poem 5/5

Wow
i am so sorry for all the pain you have had in your childhood
you are an amazing poet and i think you need to get some of them published
you'll get far

good luck and take care lana

That was really good...I almost felt the fear with you...This poem is so good and although its sad its very beautiful through the words you used....

This poem is amazing. I can feel the emotions through your words. It's a very deep and beautiful poem. Fantastic work.

x.xBrokenx.x