Comments : Me, my enemy

  • 18 years ago

    by Alex xxx

    Wow, that was a really heart touching poem. You describe it so well i could feel all the thought and see myself there. Its quite long. But full with emotion well done babes

    Take care
    Much love
    alex xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Neil

    Very interesting hun very i like your style keep it up

  • 18 years ago

    by Timeless Hopeful

    Sam:

    This poem has great potential, but this is still an idea that needs to be refined into a great poem.

    Your first and second stanzas are really good… But they all are random…They can be re worked. But they need to be cut down. Here is what I thought:

    “There are moments lately when I see me
    being the desperate person I used to be
    Is now coming through in my faulty designs
    Totally afraid that this will always be my trap

    This person I told you I so dearly despised
    This desperate, sad clichéd person
    Distraught & dismayed, wanting to turn round and take some steps back.”

    See I made two stanzas by just one of your stanza’s…Your poem needs work. It has the emotion, now all it needs is your personal poetic style.

  • 18 years ago

    by Nicole

    I love ur poems yet u cannot let anything overcome u u have to keep fighting through life. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Savanha

    Omg wow... this was awesome. 5/5