Happy Girl Within Me

by Lost & Delirious   Jun 1, 2006


Youth's a unique treasure I'm lucky to posses,
Energy and happiness singing along with dreams.
It's a shame how everything I touch goes to waste,
And the meaning of being young has become unclear.

I've been drowning myself in these burning fears,
Trapped in my own creation, my silent cage.
Tragedy surrounds me and hope disappears,
I'm choking with time, I just try to feel safe.

I've been fighting for a tender and sweet smile,
But storm after storm all I get are more tears.
Am I just this sad girl crying alone in life,
Or is sadness killing the happy girl within me?

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  • 18 years ago

    by Driver

    Wow, excellent poem... the ending question ends it nicely... well composed as well... and thanks for the comments..
    Driver

  • 18 years ago

    by UnToLd TrUtH

    Wow this is so good!

  • 18 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    You ended two lines with the word 'tears', and I think you should try to replace one of them; the repitition didn't benefit the flow of the poem.

    What did I understand?
    All of it, loud and clear.

    How did it make me feel?
    I philosophically considered the importance of youth, which made me smile a bit. I then considered your situation and felt bad for you. Then in the final two lines and considered the difference between the two options, and whether any of us can say we are one or the other, or if maybe we're both.

    Which part did I like and why?
    I liked the first stanza because it was introspective and what I consider to be a philosophical truth, eloquently put. I liked the last line because it was an interesting question that maybe everyone should try to ask themselves at one point or another.

  • 18 years ago

    by 111308

    Am I just this sad girl crying alone in life,
    Or is sadness killing the happy girl within me?

    Those made the poem stand out brilliantly! amazing poem! short but so full with emotion! yuor a very talented writer keep it up :D
    ♥
    Steph

  • 18 years ago

    by Brook

    This is really really cute..i loved it. Sad, but happy at the same time..perfect, 5/5