Hey really great. i really got the message very clearly, you can tell it was very heartfelt.
5/5

XoXo

Lauren

(i'll r/r/c the other tomorrow b/c i gtg)

Am I just this sad girl crying alone in life,
Or is sadness killing the happy girl within me?
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Those 2 lines were, WOW. This was an amazing poem. Was a little short, But you worded it beautifully. I honestly loved this peice. Really great work. Keep it up! 5/5

`Taleee xx

This is a brilliant poem. I understood exactly what you were saying and could relate,

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That is really good. The last two lines left a great impact on the poem and really made you think. You did a great job on this. 5/5**

Aww, great poem! It's so sad, but I can see the truth in it, I hope everything is well. Keep up your beautiful writing, because I see that it is very powerful! 5/5

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Awww.. that is so sad.. i loved this! it was so emotional, and it flowed well, and i love the last stanza.. great write! 5/5

Great poem--u did an amazing job with creating the feeling of loneliness
"I've been fighting for a tender and sweet smile,
But storm after storm all I get are more tears."
Love these lines--- 5/5 keep it up

This is really really cute..i loved it. Sad, but happy at the same time..perfect, 5/5

Am I just this sad girl crying alone in life,
Or is sadness killing the happy girl within me?

Those made the poem stand out brilliantly! amazing poem! short but so full with emotion! yuor a very talented writer keep it up :D
♥
Steph

You ended two lines with the word 'tears', and I think you should try to replace one of them; the repitition didn't benefit the flow of the poem.

What did I understand?
All of it, loud and clear.

How did it make me feel?
I philosophically considered the importance of youth, which made me smile a bit. I then considered your situation and felt bad for you. Then in the final two lines and considered the difference between the two options, and whether any of us can say we are one or the other, or if maybe we're both.

Which part did I like and why?
I liked the first stanza because it was introspective and what I consider to be a philosophical truth, eloquently put. I liked the last line because it was an interesting question that maybe everyone should try to ask themselves at one point or another.

Wow this is so good!

Wow, excellent poem... the ending question ends it nicely... well composed as well... and thanks for the comments..
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