I love this so0o much. The ryhme scheme is similar to the form I use, its challenging but cool. The only critique I have is the last stanza is a bt outgoing. {5/5}

[PygmyPuff]

WOW love it:)
I haven't read your stuff for a very long time, but it looks like you've just gotten better.
There were so many lines that made me think, that will stick in my mind for a very long time.
Awesome write:)
Hope youre doing well..
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