Under control

by *~Brittaney~*   Jun 1, 2006


I've been so in love with you from the day you said hello,
the words just seemed to flow
As soon as I saw your face
Your smile just made me melt

Everything about you seemed so perfect, time flew by and it was just us to, happy and healthy and all under control.

Then right out of nowhere love took control, we could'nt contain our love anymore.The more and more i think of you, the more i see loves takin' over

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  • 18 years ago

    by Nee

    **for the reader to read!
    I'm dumb,lol =D
    xXxXx

  • 18 years ago

    by Nee

    This was a sweet poem
    but I think you shud split the poem into lines and stanzas
    it'd be easier for the writer to read, cuz you know some ppl are very lazy to read a poem like this! hehe
    Don't feel offended because the poem overall is very sweet, I can relate also =)

    I'll keep commenting on your poems after I'm done with my exams
    and I want to thank you for your beautiful comments, you really made my day!
    Best Of Luck
    NemO x0x0x0x

  • 18 years ago

    by C Cattaway

    Hey sweetie.. so full of promise.. Hope you don't mind a correction.. the words 'to' on two consecutive lines should be spelt 'tpp', as you use it to mean 'aswell'.. Other than that, I love the innocence of your poem. Well done. xx

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