Kurt-
You're Awesome...
I Love This Poem and I Love You.
This Poem is So... Sweet.. And Just Really Cool.

C'est Cool... ( :

xoxo

Love,

Lauren

Kurt-
You're Awesome...
I Love This Poem and I Love You.
This Poem is So... Sweet.. And Just Really Cool.

C'est Cool... ( :

xoxo

Love,

Lauren

Aww.. that is so sweet! yet another great poem! it flowed perfectly without any glitches, good descriptions, and lots of emotion! great write! 5/5

I love this i simple but effective flows beautifully and i can feel the meaning behind it a great job :D

I'm sure Lauren would have loved this.
This is great. A very down to earth friendship poem :_)

Awww sooo sweet, really good
i love it

Aww, this is sweet, the rhyming is good though maybe u have repeated the word 'friend' a little too much.

another tiny point is that uv changed the erm...i dno what to call it but what i mean is in some places u use plural pronouns (ie we, our, us etc) and others you have used singular pronouns (ie you)

it is a bit confusin whilst reading the poem and i think u should aim to stick to either one or the other throughout the poem. it would be good to have the first four stanzas using plural (as in addressing your audience as a whole) so for example the second stanza would begin:

A friend who's always there for us(instead of you)

and then the last stanza as a singular in order to emphasise the message by addressing it directly to your friend. (which you have done already but it would be more evident if it was in contrast to the rest of the poem)

hope that makes sense...

all the best
-biscuit-