Something Made You Different

This poem was cute and sweet. But here the ryhming seems forced again. The flow was also knocked off because of the rhyming.

For example: The fourth stanza has the most cliche rhyming scheme

I know you're scared, despite that smile
I can feel when you're shaking
Yet you stepped across the walls I set up
My emotional barriers breaking

This stanza needs some work. I wouldn't know what to really suggest because this came from your heart so you would have to choose the emotional words that best suits you. But I do believe that in some lines you have to many words and in others you need to put more in. So you can work on that. This is really not one of your best poems. But I loved that message you tried to get across, so I'm giving you a 5/5. And another thing, use punctuation please, because I really had a hard time with knowing when to pause or to keep going.

Keep writing hun! Because it only makes you better.

Love
Letty

I love this poem.Its sweet.Keep up the great work. :-D

Aww SO Awesome. This Is EXACTLY How i Feel about My b/f Turtle(kurt lol) 5/5 for sure.

Btw do u mind(if i give credit of course) i put this in my info?

xLaurenx

That's a good poem, maybe adding a little more imagery to it would help :D
TTYL
>>MIA

I really like this poem. its sweet and simple the perfect combination.