Powerful write, the way you stop and leave the ending sort of open adds to this power as the reader knows what is to come but is not told dirrectly. |
by ForgottenLuv
OMG im so sorry if this poem is true!! i seriously hope this NEVER happened to you!! good poem |
by Natalie
Wow. This was sad. Really good though. Has great imagry. I think you should try and do a 2nd part. Cause at the end you said 'My worst nightmare began' You could write another one explaining it more. But awesome poem. I really enjoyed reading it! 5/5 |
by Tylor Dent
I dont think that should ever happen to anybuddy thats sad well great job keep writing. |
by Timothy r
A very powerful poem indeed, I agree with master of shadow as he said leaving the ending short lends to the power of this. Great job, and thank you for your lovely comments on mine. I will continue to read your work. Timothy r |
by Sarah Ann
Aww, sweetie that was an extremely well written and powerful poem. I could feel your pain if such an incident was true. I've been through the same. Keep it up and stay strong. 5/5 |
by Heather
I like this poem of urs its good and i understand it i almost was in that position but i was lucky to get out!! i have read ur other poems u r good at it keep it up |
Short. But Amazingly Powerful Wonderfully Written And Great Message.. I Hope You(if This Happened To You) Filed Charges And He's Put Away.. |
Omg...that's terrible(not the poem...what happened)...you described it so well though...i could see it in my mind. 5/5. stay strong. |
Wow.... that poem was really good... brought back memorys though... you are very talented. |
Wow.. that's like the main word I can say right now. I think this is a really sad poem but very well written. ~__^ And if this is true about you or a friend then I'm also sorry that it happened. u__u. 5/5 for dope lol. |
I like the way you just let the reader guess at what was going to happen next. It is assumable, but you don't say it out right.:) Great job! |
by Rin
Ahhh sweetie , i felt the hirt and the pain,That should never have to happen. This flows nicely. Keep up the good work |
by kida
That freaked me out a little bit but i like it mayb u could expand on it>? |