"cant you see" should be can't

"your doing to me" should be you're

"saying your not" should be you're

"i didnt want" should be didn't

"ive done all this" should be I've

"im better for you" should be I'm

I thought you could have used more descriptive language in your poem. Saying things explicitly like "I am sad" is not very poetic. Instead of stating emotions, it might be a better exercise to describe the circumstances underwhich you are upset, or what you do when you're upset, or make metaphors and similes to get across how upset you are.

Eh, Not The Best I've Read, But You Show Potential. You Need To Be More Descriptive. This Poem Showed What Seems To Be The TIP Of The Iceberg-So To Say. You Could Use Much Better Language-I Feel- to Portray These Emotions.Haven't You Ever Heard The 'No Ad Words Rule?(Sad, Mad, Glad).lol. Also, More Detail Could Give It Much Greater Imagery.

xoxo

xLauren3