Wow! I really liked this one aswell. You used pretty good imagery. And if this is based on anything true, I'm really sorry.

Awesome poem though. I loved it. Keep up the awesome work!! 5/5

`Taleee xx

This poem was amazing, purely amazing. I'm really sorry if this is based on true events however. *Hugs*

Omg.. this was horrible ( the idea i mean ) it was just so sad.. but you expressed it extremely well, it all flowed well, and there was just tons of emotion! excellent write! 5/5

Great use of imagery
i loved it
it was really sad and had a great flow to it. it was full of vehemence and power
very well written
~HazE