Great poem! I loved the fourth stanza, sort of how I feel about my ex. The whole situation I can relate to. Keep up your good work! 5/5

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I love it so much!
its very sweet and lovely!
the title is very captivating too =)

Keep it up huni
Best Of Luck
NemO xxxxxxx

I loved every word of this sweet but kinda sad well done ^^pickle^^

I love it. :)
Job well done.
Its very sad though.
Flows together very wonderfully. :)

>black&&blue

Awww.. that was sweet but very sad..the rhymes all worked well, as did your beautiful descriptions, and your words full of emotion! wonderful work! 5/5

Holy crap... i tried to catch most of it... but the line that stuck with me the most is his girlfriend needs to die!... holy crap... lol... the rest was really good but i think that was a little harsh... lol... but good job still... keep up the good work...

david...

I like the way you rhytmed and the flow of the words very nicely written...

I like the way you rhytmed and the flow of the words very nicely written...

This was so good! i love how you express the forbidden love
keep it up!

I couldn't really get into this poem. I think you switched your style of writing a lot. It starts out really 'casual' but then gets really descriptive and imaginitive. Just hard to read. I do like the last two stanzas, though, so 3/5.

Aww. I feel the same way about a guy. And it totally sucks when he doesn't love you like you love him. Just keep your chin up. =)

The flow was good, the words were good...Great write. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

So im sitting in 4th hour looking at this guy who ive been in love with forever and he has no idea, this poem is perfect for how im feeling right now, loved the flow and u kept it going

keep it up thx for rrc on my poem

Wow, amazing rythm! I love when I find things different to my own! and this was overwelming!

Sitting on the sidewalk,
I watch him walk by.
I really want to talk...
his girlfriend needs to die
^^^
I really like this stanza.

There a fair bit of anger toward his girlfriend, maybe even a bit of jealousy?

The emotions you have penned are beautiful, and the rhyming is really good!

well done!

~Murder.

This deserves to be a 5!! i loved the flow and description in this poem, great job, 5/5!!! keep it up!!!!

AW THIS POEM IS VERY NICE! ANOTHER GOOD POEM!!!

Oh jeez. Probably the most demented love poem I've read. You've got the darkness going for you.

Advice: Use more details. There really wasn't any emotion besides anger. Where's the love?

It was a nice poem... you need to put in more advanced vocab and the flow was a little off on the second to last stanza... it was really a nice poem though, keep up the good work

I loved this.
''His gf needs to die'' ''drown him here?'' both made me laugh, maybe I just have a sick sense of humor

The tiltle was so catchy and passionate, that i was kind of disappointed with the poem. Just some honest feedback.
"and I can't touch!" i think you should change that to, "but I can't touch" it makes more sense. This reminds me of a secret crush you want so bad, but you cant get him. Just take what i said into consideration. Good job!
4/5