A well written and thought provoking piece JL, really makes one question themselves and their actions...I love poetry which stimulates personal growth and contemplation and this a great example...In answer to the questions posed in your poem, with as many regrets as I may have I would not change a thing, the pain and laugher and love and hurt I have felt define who I am today and as sad as I have been at times, I am proud of the person I am today and would not change a thing...fantastic write though my friend :O)

I was reading that poem thinking back...what would I change. Wow...thought provoking...something I think we ALL sit and think about at one point in our lives. Nicely done!!

Thanks, i'm glad you enjoyed it =)

Before I start I want to say that I LOVE this piece…as I told you in my prior comment. It gives you a million things to think about…in your own life and in the entire world even.

I have three minor problems with this poem…in the third and fifth and seventh stanzas the last line seems like it was put there merely to rhyme with the second line. Maybe, I’m wrong…and if I am I do apologize…if I’m right, then a little tweaking could fix that problem nicely.

Stanza 2, 6, 8, were PERFECT…I LOVE the way you wrote those. I’m wondering also, if the last stanza should need a tiny change…should it be “WOULD you change the future”

In this stanza:
“Would you see a doctor
To prevent a stroke
A family torn apart
Half wishes you would croak”
To ME it read like “wishes” should be “wishing” – I THINK!!

Over all as I said this poem is awesome!! I think what you are trying to portray clearly comes across…I like this piece…well done…I hope my “critiquing” was helpful…if not I’M SORRY!!! LoL Take Care

Oh MAN...I'll repost it in the discussion forum...SORRY!!!!!!!