That was AMAZING. I loved that. Incredibly dark and slightly creepy, but you did a wonderful job writing this. 5/5.

Pretty creepy story - I wouldn't like to come across that world XD
5/5

Creeepy, scary but marvolous... very good, loved ur choice of words and the way u put them together was excellent!!!

Seems like this person has schizophrenia, where she is talking to herself, or is in her own little world. Hearing voices and whatnot. That is indeed something terrifying for the person. There was also a very nice poetic essence to this poem. So well done.

Really amazing poem. I really loved it. A little scary a that but a great poem!

That's creepy!! You did a very good job though. I like it. It sort of scared me. Sort of like a nightmare that you can't wake up from. 5/5 completely. You deserve it. Keep it up.

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I love this poem. its so good. just two things i didnt like it how the last stanza was 8 lines and everything else four. but it was still good. and i found that the second to last stanza didnt flow because it was much longer then the rest. but other then that great job!!!!

Quite demented, i liked it though. 5/5

Omg im realy sorry buut i had a lot of trouble reading this poem.. its too dark and ugh.. i dont know the flow was good as well as the rhyme but it was very hard to get through... its good because it was really descritpive though.. and for people who can stand reading dark poems im sure didnt mind the length at all.. also i couldnt comment your poem the language of the dead it was just to much so im sorry but ill comment another one in place of that :)

I think I've commented this on a past account. Anyway. This is good, it has a unique feel to it, it's dark and the vocabulary is suited. Some of the rhymes are a little off, but I can't really give any advice off this poem because it was written so long ago. Good work with this one, 5/5

jess ~