Love it just love it. Don't care what anyone says. *Shakes our heads* We love it and thats all that counts. >_> Hehe. Well others count. but it was lovley. Great Job yet again M'Dear.

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Very good lyrics, just very curious now on which kinda music you would do this?could see alanis morissette sing something like this :))
one verrrrry small thing: "
And when these tears run dry" sounds definatly good when you read it, but if you would sing that ,with a stronger voice I think "and when tears run dry" without"these" sings more easy,in lyrics words like that can be left out easy without touching anything meaningfull , in contrary to a poem
not a critic, just an observation,
rate it 5/5 :d, it's great

As I was reading this, I Was singing it in my head and it really is a nice song. I especially loved how you had the word before inside (). It gave it a different sort of touch. I'm assuming that's for back up singers but I could be wrong. I'd love to hear this played someday as with all your songs. Your third stanza is the only thing I didn't really care for. I don't know it just didn't seem to fit right but other than that another amazing job. Hope that you can sing lol because these songs should be heard.

Great lyrics! i loved it catchy and easy to relate too.
only thing is the line "That i have already fell." fell should be fallen i knoe youuve done that to get the rhyme its just a bit weird when you readit , it probaly sounds better sung anway i really liked it definately 5/5

Nice work! I love everything about this poem.. I wish that I could hear it put to music. Keep it up!