Tainted Eyes

Aight Kim...I have already commented but lets see if I can critique...now remember it is hard enough for me to write my poems, let alone critique your talent..but I will surely try my best!

The imagery created is very vivid and deeply thought provoking. The words used highlight the dark feel of this poem...oh wow this is hard...lol

I like the flow as it is undisturbed the olny thing I can think of even though it doesn't disturb the flow your second stanza has less lines than the other 2.

1ST stanza...maybe use patterned instead of flowered (although depending on what imagery you want to project).

And the 3rd stanza...you have
Leaving raped souls
With tainted eyes

to match the first line maybe it would match up more if you were to have it read:
Leaving raped souls with
Tainted eyes

Hopefully Ihave helped or at least sparked ideas that were unthought of before.
It is really hard to critique perfection!!!
Awesome write!

Wow, Kim! This was such an amazing write. You really scared me with this one. Sent goosebumps down my spine. Good job, ended it nicely.

Oh my gosh this was fantastic! So deep and profound it was such a great, great read! Very well written.

Yum...this poem was delightful! So darkly written, yet so gorgeously written. Horray for Kimmie!

Superb write... Wonderfully done!