"Haven't you already set their people free?
So why are you still in their country?
Why do you wait for a terrorist attack,
When it wasn't the people from Iraq?"

i love that it was amazing you did a great job and the topic was pick well somthing we all need to think about... nice job 5.5

This was awesome!! Everything flowed really well and the rhyme scheme was awesome. The poem was just awesome too! Yesh, Theres nothing that I'd change either. It's really good! 5/5

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I LOVE IT!! Your an awesome writer. keep up the good work bud, and you'll go far ^^

\m/ ^_^ \m/ rock on

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Why do you wait for a terrorist attack,
When it wasn't the people from Iraq?

^^^ Darien this is so weird..not even 10 minutes ago I was just talking about this with someone and I just read your poem...*shivers*
I don't understand to much about the war....politics have never been my thing..I know I'm 15 and I should know a little about it, but I'm always so confused.....but then again every soldier I have talked to...4 to be exact...all four of them said "we need to be over there" neither of them said why except one person just said "its just so bad"....but still...I agree with your poem.....its amazing your such a talented writer!

I so totally agree with this. i don't understand why we are over there when really the terrorists could still just attack us over here. it is also really good writing with wonderful flow. 5/5

Powerful message. An excellent write Darien. These words are on the tips of everyone's tongue I'm sure! Wonderfully written sir... Your rhymes are enjoyable and the flow is exquisite. A very impressive piece.

I so agree with the last stanza!!!
very awesome poem once again!
they're ALL amazing!

ashes

Wow, this is one powerful poem here, Darien! So well written and to the point.. Excellent work with so much truth, great job on delivering your message!

I thought the poem read well, and had excellent rhyming.

I disagreed with parts of the message though. We're currently in Iraq because though the people are 'free', the region is highly unstable. If we left today, a Democratic Iraqi Government wouldn't last a month, it'd be overrun by violent reactionary or radical forces.

As much as I don't like war, now that we've made it unstable, we need to fix it.

Well said!

4/5
Good i can see this subject mean some think to u. this shown through in the peom so much towards the last three lines seemed out of place.

Wow, darien, i just want you to know, that you are an amazing poet.. you truly have a talent and i believe you use it to its full potential! this was an excellent write, full of emotion, with a great flow and rhymes that were perfect, and a brilliant message! GREAT write! 10/5

First off you made some really good points which I thought was a really great idea but it seemed at times a bit like a PSA. Meaning it felt more as if you were telling instead of showing us. It did feel strong though and had some vivid but at times haunting imagery that is if the readers can connect to the picture. Rereading some parts I see now how your words do make a picture. It really was a good poem though.

Hey, I really like you're poem.

Hey its a gr8 poem... I'm Iraqi myself but we were never set free. We never will be until the resistance army takes over. If u ever wanna chat add me on starlite_dusk@hotmail.com

So true

Wow........that was srong....im speachless on what els to say...
Jennifer

Wow........that was srong....im speachless on what els to say...
Jennifer

'Innocent people will die today,
Politicians will keep it that way.'

The Offspring?

Comfortable Upbeat Rythm With a Huge Meaning Behind It All, I Enjoyed Reading It And Couldn't Agree More
5/5
xoxo-Nikki-xoxo