You should try to break it down into different stanzas (paragraphs) it would give it better rythme & flow, but good job!

**meggie**

Yeh i agree, it could flow more smoothly, but i think this is lovely. and i can relate, and personally, i love not keeping your writing in a set form e.t.c, let it be how it is, well done!!

Thank you for your comments I apperciate it very much theses past few years have been really hard on me ...for then recenetly someone told me to keep and journal ... I was really scard @ first bc its something I nevered did...finding in an great way for me to cope with life. knowing that people apperciate it makes me happy ...also knowing I am not alone and others out there can relate to me... and experciences thank you ...
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