by Laura Jun 7, 2006
category :
Friendship, family /
broken friendship
You have spent almost half your life locked up behind bars |
Wow, very powerful, I like it from the beginning to the end. Excellently written piece with great choice of words. The first stanza is my favorite. |
by OHgreenman
Laura....girl you kicked ass in this piece!! The words used, rhymes and the flow....PERFECT!! Each stanza kept my attention and left me wanting more. Great write!! |
by Izi
This is sad,but interesting to read,keep writing |
by claire
I totally agree with your description of some people! the last verse was so true, and the whole thing was descriptive without being too wordy! |
This poem, was good. The rhyming was great. But the flow was bad.. some lines were too long some were too short.. over all I would give you a 4 .. but i don't vote lower than 5 .. so.. just read it over at check your flow.. Great job on the idea though |