Very good write! Good flow, good desciription! 5/5 Keep up the good work!

-Stephanie-

The last sentence of the first stanza, use 'I', that way the reader won't be so confused. Good poem though.

Another great poem, the imagery and language used is intelligent and captivating, you write with pure talent 5/5

It kinda confuzed me
but it flowed well n was interesting =D

Love
Jacs
xxx

You have a beautiful mind. I am impressed.