It could be longer, but its good. i would have described more what was seen in the "eyes". but thats just me. good work though, keep it up.
Ben

Aww thats a really great poem babe seriously a really nice piece of writing the rhyming wasnt forced the meaning behind it all spot on :)

and yesh im gonna go threw all the poems i havent commented on :)

Wow, yet another beautiful poem lol I love this one too (b'.')b