I liked it. I think you did great. Keep it up.

"She saw that cum was all spread."
too graphic for the 'sad' section. I'd highly suggest editing that before this gets moved to the explicit. in my opinion, you could delete that entire part... the white stains on the bed should be enough for most people.
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"And by the end we new I was dead."
'knew' not 'new'
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I don't know if this story is true or not, but it was pretty well narrated considering the rhyme. I'd suggest changing the first stanza a bit to develop a stronger rhythm.. I'd especially change the first line, it's too long.

She woke up, and said, "what have I done?"

I'd add the quotation marks, just for proper formatting. Besides that, I think that the poem has improved through the changes.

This is a pretty good poem, the flow wasn't that great. Some of your lines were longer than others. The rhymes were alright, they seem cheap though, like it was expected. But it's a good write for a younger writer. Keep on trying. Glad you used your creative mind to write this one, and not have it be true.

Excellent! the story of my life!!!! It was really good the flow was a little iffy everynow and then but I THOUGT it was great

Awww that's really sad, i really liked it!! 5/5

This is a really good poem, if you want to improve it you can add more details about your feelings back then.
I liked the way you described the situation, it was very clear what you meant, but you didn't just say: I was pregnant...you described what happened, and that's pretty cool.

XoXo
Gaby

I was gonna ask if it was a true story!
thats insane that it actually happened!
I like poems that are true!
good job rhyming too.
I don't have much advice because there is basically nothing wrong with it.
keep it up!!