by Natalie
When push comes to shove, |
by Laura
Very sad reality you have brought toour attention here. I believe we need that type of a defense for people do not understand the phsycological affect abuse canhave. |
by Lu
After reading this and putting myself in the place of a battered woman and what I would do, when escape is not possible .I really think that to protect myself and my children from the reaccuring violence and battery I would do what it takes to survive . I see the deseration of these women in a much clearer light now . |
by Simon Hayes
Woah... Darien, this is a magnificent write. Sad, painful and shocking! You are a source of knowledge my friend and I love the way you share your knowledge through poetry. Superb work!! |
by Sean Allen
Somehow I felt like this poem wanted to rhyme, but never did. I think something about the way the stanzas were... maybe the rhythm... I dunno. If you made it rhyme, that'd probably make this poem flawless in my mind. As of right now though, I can't shake the feeling that it should rhyme (I don't advocate all poems rhyming, and I'm not 100% sure why I think this one should... weird). That isn't to say that this isn't a good poem, it is. |
by firexflys
I love your work soooo much it's always about somthing real and thats amazing it's great work and you amazing at writing keep it up 5.5 |
by Beautifully Nothing
A good poem is one that leaves the readers craving for more and makes them think while and after they read it. I am sure your poem will open up people's eyes, which is what a good poem should do. The writing was amazing. Wonderful Job |
You have hit the true feelings of a battered woman to a tee and i didnt have to think to belive it as its true we really do feel like that 5/5 |
by Sydney
This is a very well written poem. Nice job done... |
by Imafae
Very realistic, very beautifull... |
by Sara
This is a nice poem, especially when the moon goes into it's lunar phase when the dark moments come to point out the darkness she feels and how in the end it shines through the night, having accomplished something that has burdened it before..This piece had a strong meaning behind it and it's a very interesting piece. |
This poem is sad but i like it. because of alcohol my moms boyfriend has beaten her for 8 years and it has finally stopped for about a year, but i still get scared when he gets mad not knowing if he is drunk again and if my mom will make it out of the hospital this time. thanks for writing this and making people think. :) |
by vamp
Awesome work |
These things Must be addressed.....what a rarity in a poetic setting....well-done and effective....Good For You! |
You seem to make a lot of poetry about logical and realistic things which is a great talent. Great peom, it flowed and was VERY informational. Thank you |
by Jessica
Omg! sorry, lol, but i just had to laugh at you! :P |
by SN
Wow after I read this I was speechless. I think it's really good! |
I have an aunt in an abusive marriage and every time I hear of my uncle getting drunk and coming home and beating her, I'm waiting to hear that she finally got up the guts to shoot the bastard. This poem reminds me of all the women I've met in my life in abusive relationship - verbally or physically - and how people tend to take a lot of crap and then 'enough is enough' flip out. |
by AnnMarie
I did not know that!!! Wow it was good! The flow was not as good this time, some of the stuff just did not ryhme all the same is was really good your still a fav. please return the favor as said in the forum!!! |
by ShadowDancer
I loved the repetition and slight change of the first and last stanza. it opend and closed your poem beautifuly. you really painted a picture with your words through this poem. the flow was good, which can be tricky with a non rhyming pome |