Comments : The reason why i'm acting like i do.

  • 18 years ago

    by Kaylee

    Alright while it was short it did keep some attention.

    I was fashioned as a ragdoll
    my pattern cut from several yards of flesh
    sewn neatly at the sides

    I used the rag doll before. Nice way if you really need to describe someone. You took very good originality by adding the sewn part.

    Floating in and out of the masses
    I am now a balloon
    meant to take up room

    Seems a bit forced. I think you could have added more detail to it or maybe changed the wording to fit the scheme.

    The last line held a bit of sadness to it although smeone can take it as anger.That's why poetry is so great. I thought the final stanza was okay but the last line was one of your strongest.

  • 18 years ago

    by PygmyPuff

    I absolutly *LOVE* this poem. I love the imagery and thematic depth. You have serious talent. Id give it a 10, but its stuck with a 5.

    [PygmyPuff]

  • 18 years ago

    by firexflys

    Nice poem i like the way it's diffrent from other things on the site. it has it's own style all in it's self keep it up 5.5