Comments : Beautifully goodbyes

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    Youll = you'll

    strenth = Strength

    stupied = Stupid

    ppl = people

    cupied = cupid

    your slowly breaking my heart = You're slowly breaking my heart.

    Actually, I think I might just write this whole poem here so you can see what I'm actually trying to say and do..

    Bite your tougue, Tast the blood.
    Slit your wrist, Feel the pain.
    Maybe then you'll get the strength I gain,
    Crying over you makes me weak and stupid.
    Only retarted people would say it's cupid.
    Stop saying you love me, Becayse I know it's not true.
    You're slowly breaking my heart,
    Do you have nothing better to do?
    Just kiss me on the cheek,
    Say your beautiful goodbyes.
    Because my love for you has long died.

    ..Hope you don't get offended. I was just trying to help a bit. This was a great poem though, Just needed a little working on. Keep it up. Annd, Just so you know, Puting 'Read my poem please' in your title, Can get you points leading to getting your acount suspended. Just thought I'd tell you that so you knew in the future. Keep writing though. 5/5

    God bless and take care

    `Taleee xx

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    Bite your tongue, Taste the blood* Sorry about that.