Comments : The last goodbye

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    This was good. Was a little short. But still good. Though the last two lines seemed to throw the poem off.
    Maybe instead of this part:
    " She looks at him,
    to say her last goodbye,
    and all that he can muster,
    is a sob and a sigh."

    You could put:
    "She looks at him,
    To say her last goodbye.
    He holds her close,
    With a tear in his eye."

    That might sound stupid, I dunno. It was good though. Keep it up 5/5

    `Taleee xx

  • 18 years ago

    by miss murder

    Omg wow its....wow...dude its awesome as always

  • 18 years ago

    by P_isgone

    Ty