by Kaylee Jun 10, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
first love
Verse One |
I luv it! I can imagine this with music behind it! |
by James Brady
Not bad... |
by Darien
Again, the slang through off the poem. It works when it comes to cutting down syllables and stuff, but for me, I just don't like how it sounds in a song, but I would really like to hear what you have. Still, another great poem/lyrics. |
by Jessica
Wow, another amazing poem! personally, i find it a bit difficult to read with all the colloqial language, but thats just me.. the emotions are clear and the flow was good! nice write! 5/5 |
by N J Thornton
Emotional lyrics, they have the beat to them to allow me to guess the tune the music would be. You used some touching ideas, and the chorus especially is very catchy (very important in a song). |