Comments : Just a Memory

  • 18 years ago

    by Arcane Blondie

    Really good poem-I like the topic of it---The only thing is that its a little short but many good poems are short. I think you could add to the poem and add more about the emotion because the topic of it is a very strong and powerful one. The flow was good, but the two lines I had trouble really smoothly are:

    ''And everday i felt even more crappy,
    When you weren't there."

    Im not sure why that doesnt flow for me----maybe its just me--idk...anyway very good poem and I enjoyed reading it-you definately have a lot of talent!