Maybe limit the amount of times you mention 'hold.' Now the poem was short but it felt more PSA (Public Service Announcement] narrative than an emotional piece. Instead of saying hold me while you can describe emotionally how it feels to be held with either poetic or non poetic words. Try metaphors and even similies [But I'd limit on those].

Dis is cute...gud job..4/5

Thumbs up great work 5/5:)

Wow good.