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I enjoyed this one...I can relate.

I love this one too. Its close to one I wrote. The ending didn't sursprise me too much because I know that scene too well myself.

I think this poem would be greatly improved if you used one of the following, or both:
-More detailed descriptions
-Poetic tools and language

Throw in some similes, some metaphors, a few symbols. Use more complicated words, don't always say what you mean straight out. Show the reader how this person treats you, don't just tell it to them straight. Describe what he says, describe the situation where he was there, describe your scratches, real or metaphorical.

And I thought the ending was too abrupt. The twist was interesting, but the syllable count was too low and it was too blatant and unpoetic.

This was fair poem, but if it was fixed up with some of the things that make poetry great, it'd get a lot better.

I thought it was good. The ending really suprised me, I wasn't expecting that at all. You have some places where it doesn't really flow that well, but over all I thought you did a great job.

Indeed it's a lovely poem...i also like the twist at the end...