Wow! that was way good! congrats on winning my contest! ur work was beautiful. then again, it always is! 5/5

Jesyy...its a nice poem but i still love your emotional poems!!!!and this was like a story...not poem!

As I listen quietly to these words..
I drop the phone..
I slide down the wall
And start to sob
Sob after sob
Explodes from within me..
And as I cry, I sit
Sit and wait for the man
That I know
Is never to return..
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I loved that last part Jessy. This was such an emotional peice. Really good!! Keep it up =D 5/5

`Taleee xx

Hopes this isn't true. Now you do a good job of telling but it just doesn't feel as if you went deep enough to show us this girl crying for her lost love. Maybe describe emotionals a bit more if you can :)

Oh my gosh! *tears* So sad! You're talented! 5/5 Keep up the good work!

-Stephanie-

"The man told me
That there had been an accident
I wince but do not understand"

You shifted between the past and present tense from 'told' to 'wince'. You need to pick one and stick with it, otherwise everything becomes too muddled.
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I think that the rhythm varies too much from stanza to stanza, and that makes certain parts of the poem disruptive, which obscures the story. It was a good poem though.