by Joy Jun 12, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
I lay my head down to rest, |
Awwww this was a very good poem. I can relate to this one too. Omg it hurts so bad, doesn't it? I hope things turn out good for you! You did a good job on the poem! |
by not a poet
I notice alott of your poems are all written in the same stanza form, try to mix it up....forming odd sentences would really make the person focas more on specific details. great poem tho!!!! |
by Kaylee
I know people say they can relate to poems but in all honestly I can as I was hurt bad and the one person I want to let in my heart I don't want to hurt or be hurt by.My only suggestion is maybe take out the word this (the second one) in your first stanza |
by Mousie
Joy your my girl! i love u!! I know you're going through all of this...alls i can say is ERIC FREAKEN ASK HER OUT B4 WE ALL GO INSANE!!! lord!!! that kid needs to b hit really really hard!!! i'm always here for you, you know that!! |
by LOVEmeNOT
Aww...dis is cute...i like how u expressed ur feelingz...gud job..5/5 |