Wow, Jessy. This was so sad. I loved it though. You really have a way with words. I loved the 4th stanza the most, Really good imagry. Keep it up, And smile =D 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

Wonderful, there is no other way to describe it! Great job again! 5/5 Keep up the good work! Thx for commenting on my poem too!

-Stephanie-

Omg wow amazing. this is such a great poem i lvoe it. its so good. i can relate to it. i kno how u feel. i kno wut ur goin thru.. its such a sad but excellent poem. i love it.. keep writing.. 5/5
take care
angie

Lovely poem! so sad yet so emotionally appealing! u can really make magic with words! love the poem!

Aww such a sad poem. I can feel all the emotions you put in there. There is nothing wrong with you, it's the world. The world is a cruel place, because of people. Not us, but people! lol. Of fine, I blame all the bad people, and I don't think you're a bad person, so it's not you! .. anyways I hope that bit made you laugh. I am so confusing at times. Great poem, I enjoyed it. We sometimes questions ourselves with that one.

Though the emotion in the poem was well done, along with the imagery, I felt like the lack of personal detail was a flaw. Instead of delving into the problems of the girl, the poem just brushes over the fact that they exist. It focuses more on her emotion than the girl herself. I think that if you were to revise the poem, you should at least add one stanza of recollection or reflection upon the personal details.