This poem is sad, though short, and I think if you wanted to you could have gone even deeper and describe each scene in so much detail we could envision it better but not so much detail that the words merely tell the story you're trying to give your readers. Focus more on the emotions which will envoke the same type in your readers but for now your poem was again short and sad.

I agree with kaylee, altho i did really like the poem, i thought it was short but sweet. welldone, Keep writing!

I am really sorry about your uncle sudden deaths seem to hurt the most b/c you are expecting them to be there and you dont even get to say goodbye. had the same thing happen to my aunt but you know i dont want to say i know how you feel cuz i dont. any way if you remember me then thanks for the boyfriend advice i will still wait for him but ill also stay looking and double thinking. so thanks a ton! and you didnt upset me. great poems love reading them. if you wanna talk then just click on my name and email me or send me a personal message. keep up the good work cant wait to read more.