Great job I really liked this!! It's a bit long though for "lyrics" maybe shorten it up? Or do a 2 part song?

Keep writing!!

joy*:.xx

Wow, i loved that, and i dont think its too long, it really touched me and i think it would work well with music.
xxxxxxx

Awww.. that just made me cry (forgive my weak heart).. hehe.. but it was just so emotional, sensational, and very heartfelt.. i dunno, it was just so moving and it moved me.. i like how u protrayed my motto (:P) "if u love something let it go, if it comes back to u, its urz to keep.. if it doesnt, i was never urz to begin with" A-M-A-Z-I-N-G just wonderful.. on a scale of 1 - 10, 10 being superb.. ur a certified 11 with this one :P:P..
im not so into love and that mushy, lovey-dovey thing, but this was just mind-blowing.. and esp. that i hv almost the same principle on love issues and stuff.. i adore ur sixth verse.. i mean, wow.. o and of course ur chorus..
great great job
thumbs up
keep going, ur great
take care
NannO

AMAZING !!! i truly mean this =) but i think it's just a verse too long =) still an amazingly good job =) 5/5

~StefQ

"Thought I found me an undiscovered miracle"
[I thought the 'me' in the line threw it off.

The chorus was great, but the last line wasn't my style. I guess it's because I'm not use to slang words in songs. I'm not much of a hip-hop/R&B person, and I can tell from the language, this isn't rock. Good stuff though. Very well thought out song, with great meaning of romance and love.

Great Poem, I enjoyed reading it- so thanx
When you have the chance, could you rate my poem “If I”
Appreciated- Truly Spoken