by Driver Jun 14, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
Lying awake at night I begin to wonder what it's like, to live without someone by your side. |
I loved the imagery of this one especially the frail rose. I liked the way you ended with a question to leave the reader with something. I don't feel it flowed a swell as it could and in places some lines felt forced but you have a strong style and great vocab. |
I really liked the ending.. It seemed to pull the whole poem together. You're a strong writer.. Keep it up. |
by LadyPearl
Overall, pretty good use of words. It could be better and easier to read if you shorten your lines and make stanzas. |
As it slowly started to rain on the inside. |
Driver -- |