Not the greatest flow but the plot and storyline are grrt...the ending was powerful and i liked it alot tho...u hav definite talent and it very obvious that ur good at this....
love ya lots,
sore

Aw thats so sad, so pitiful but beautiful my dear! Great poem!

xoxoxo Haley

Omg, that was so sad.. I really liked it!
That would make a really good movie I reckon..
Great job.. 5/5

Very clear plot to this peice, you told the story very well with a lot of power and well presented aspects