A very nice Cinquain. You've done a great job on it for your first one. I havn't done one of these yet, But, I'm thinking about it tehe. Awesome job!! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

I find cinquains terribly difficult to rhyme due to the syllable restrictions, but you did a very good job of getting an entire story across in just five lines and 22 syllables.

Structured, full and to the point.

Seems like you done well

For your first attempt I thought this was really well done. I've don't try structured poems often because i like free style and no rules, but you followed the rules and did a great job. Powerful.
Great write

Cinquains are tough, very well done. it's hard to actually get a message across with them, but you managed well. i'm curious on what form you'll try next

Thank u for the comment, i appreciate it, ive done a few cinquains, but not too good as these.

Wow, I thought that was pretty deep for such a short poem.

"My trust killed by the truth."
That was a great line, very ironic in a way. I also thought it was weird, yet cool how you consider your Father as a mentor. Never really heard that one before. Good stuff.

Gorgous! i love the form writtin, not many people do it!

Wow---short but powerful. I love how you write such unique types of poetry-And you`re always amazing at it! Great write! 5/5

Very very nice job.
can relate..all to well.
keep it up!!
--lexie

Effective poem. Well written, I can't write poems like these to save my life, but you seem an expert!

Peace. [Sole]