Heck yeah! It's California love :]

Aken Sol

I've never been to Cali.. I've never even been out of Aussie. Yeah, But anyways. I liked this. This was my favorite part:
"My California is
sparkling Southern beaches
to colder Northern bays;"
I thought it sounded really pretty. =) And the rhyming you used seemed good too. Nothing in this I think I would change. 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

True, you can't imagine a whole place without seeing it with your eyes. Great imagery and descriptions

I wish I had such pride for my state as you do. ;)

That great, I liked this poem. It brought me into your world, and I saw things from your perspective. It's a joy for the reader to imagine. Awesome stuff. Sounds like a beautiful place.

You had some great imagery in this poem that made me see the California you know and love. I felt like this poem was good, but it didn't have a Great wow to it. I am trying to think of some advice that would make this poem say wow, but I can't think of any right now. I guess it seems like a surface poem and I am so used to reading the really really deep emotional poems. Perhaps it is just different than I am used to. The last stanza of this poem really brings it together. Nice job.

-Tainted

Awesme poem flowed beautifully for most of the poem and i loved how you said "My California is not trapped by this poem." i loved that line, in fact i loved the whole poem great job. xxALLYxx

*whistles* i love the immagery it gives, so pretty. i had to write some of these for school and i never managed to get the hang of it, you sure did though. good job. keep it up.

That was a very sweet poem abour ur home state.. nice to see some people still patriotic and who love their land like this.. loved the rhyme and the flow; both were reli good... but what stood out the most for me was ur last stanza.. it brought your whole poem together, especially the last two lines.. made me feel all warm inside.. hehe:D

keep up the talent
take care
NannO

I've never been to California but this paints a pretty good image in my mind. This was another excellent captivating write! Keep writing.

Pip xxx

Wow, loved the last stanza! really excellent.. the flow in this was great and the rhymes worked well.. the descriptions were beautiful and i just got a nice warm feeling from reading this.. once again, wonderful work! i shall be checking back for more! 5/5

Lol I'm not a californian, but utah's kinda nice. newayz it's nice to hear about how states are and it makes me more interested in visiting, the rhymes were good too so that was pretty awesome! i give that a 5, nicely done

Interesting write. Love it. The image you painted was great and the flow and rhyme was good. Loved the last stanza, it stresses that California has so much more to explore. Good write. 5/5