Wow, this was a great poem. I remember I use to read your nature poems, they were something great. You are able to capture images so well with your words. Awesome stuff!

"It's sound stretching in echos of a chime"
no apostrophe needed in its, not a contraction
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"My Heart throb as the sky approaches near"
heart throbs, not throb. heh heartthrob is a guy, throbs is the singular version of the verb to throb, and since you only have one heart...
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"Jagged rocks lined the white beaches below"
this sentence was in the past tense while nearly all the others are in the present, I'd suggest changing 'lined' to 'line'
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I thought this poem was extremely original, and held a great deal of poetic imagery, which is unusual. I was thinking that this poem is about someone committing suicide, but I could be wrong... it could be a story poem, which I think is one of the reasons why I find it so interesting.

Dang, that was awesome!!!
i really liked the last lines.
it all flowed together so seamlessly and perfectly!
beautiful!

Woah!!!!!!!!! thats what I have to say, woah! lol noni, your poems are always so deep, and wonderful! GREAT JOB!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 5/5!!!!!! (again)

Wow! very deep. great work. keep up the good work! 5/5

jamie

This poem says a lot, using not so many words. I love that fact that you seem to put so much into your poems, and I wish for you to continue writing, because your poems make me happy to call myself a poet.

an absolute pleasure to read your work.

Rave.

Awesome. Read mine, please. Good job, as usual.

This poem is very vivid and mysterious - I like the imagery and the creative language. The words are so beautiful but what you are describing is horrid - they contrast with each other, almost painting a picturesque view of suicide. Incredible unique and well-written, well done :)

~ Ariana

Well, i loved it!!! Great job of expressing yourself!!! 5/5

That was really beautiful...i love the way you described it, it put a really vivid image in my head...keep up the great work!!!

This was an amazing poem!!!!! you are an fantastic writer.....5/5

Wowo nice work! loved ur details. ever line had detailin that really painted a picture in my mind! gr8 work 5/5

Wow.....amazing poem!!! 5/5 One of those poems that you read over and over taking in the whole thing----great work

Mmmm....very, very well written. Good use of imagery (I love the description of the water battling with the shore).

This is a well crafted poem...your use of diction is wonderful. I think that this is my favorite stanza:

"My Heart throbs as the sky approaches near
My fingers firmly upon the window plane
Licking away my cascading, suffering tears
I peer into the world in front with a quiet pain"

Just gorgeous!

Well done!

It was great, but i got confused! maybe that's just me, i dont know but from what i udnerstood it was awesome

Wow, nicely done...I really enjoyed this peice. There's not much to say.

xDarkSuicidex

Wowo, this poem was so sad. It was very well written. You did an awesome job on it. 5/5 Loretta