This one is really good! its a little hard to understand for me, but thats just me. this poem is actually really good! so keep thinking of inperationss!

Wow this is really good Darien.

Omg love it!!!!!!!!!! your a great poet, what else is there to say?

Wow...im speachless, im strugglin 4 words to say! Ive had that feeling, so I compleatly understand whats going on! it's so...wow...

I like i really do.

I like i really do.

This poem, was good...You chose your wording perfectly, the title and the poem was excellent, if i was you, i wouldn't change a thing

Wow, this is insanely good...i could really feel your anger...it was so passionate..i loved the ending too...bravo

I like that song...lol...anywho...Amazing poem....I loved the lines...the flow was amaizng...it was just an all around great piece of work...
Emma 5/5

Though I don't know you that well to know whether or not this is how you truely feel, you definately have some very good connections here. It is amazing...I really like how you used the ice to connect with the emotions...very good write!

This is an amazing poem, I loved it. I think I read it before but didn't comment, so now I'm commenting.
I really liked the second stanza, the words you used are perfect. I also loved the title, it's pretty cool.

Good job!

XoXo
Gaby

Amazing poem. It was quite interesting to read. I loved the final stanza.

Wow, another awesome poem. very deep of anger and sadness. u got a rythme for this poem. my favorit is the 3 vers 'cause it's the most detailed:)

OMG! Darien! This is one of my favorite poems i've ever read!! Lol. It's probably because I really like dark poems. It was really well written. The flow and rhyming all that stuff was very good. You did a great job on this poem!

Cayce x

Oooooh I love this. This is by far the best peom I've read by you. I love the metaphor in it, The flow and rhythm was really good and held up well and it was overall, amazingly written. I love it!

I didnt really enjoy this one as much as I have your others so far. It seemed a little distant and didnt really go into much detail or description. But, It was still a good effort and a whole lot better then anything I could do! Great work.
xxx Ami

Not as good as the first I read I'll have to confess but still, I liked it
Very good.
4/5
~Emah

There is someone who i would very much like to mail this to. Great work.

When i first read the title, i thought of that mcr song!

Well, this was a very morbid and kind of disturbing poem, but I can't say that most of mine aren't. i enjoyed reading it and i didn't find any major flaws in the rhythm. This isn't one of your best, but i still liked it :D

--Steph

Oh how I love My Chemical Romance. They are one of the best. :) I think this part is one of the best:

"Your body would freeze.
Except for your heart.
It was already cold,
Now it will fall apart."

It is one of the parts that makes this poem so dark, so deep.

Great job.

>black&&blue