"So I write of my days
In invisible ink
So that no one will ever
Know the secrets and lies
That I live within.."

I thought it was a great stanza, but the flow was off. You should write.

"So I write of my days
In invisible ink
No one will ever know
the secrets and lies
That I live within.."

Just thought it might help a little. Great ending. I really liked this poem.

Very nice poem Jessy! I like it alot. I seen it in the contest. I hope you win tehe. And that poem you read is true. I'm just having a bad day, But I'll get over it =) You've done a great job on this though, Take Dariens advice and it'll be greater! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

This is a wonderful poem. i like it alot and how people won't ever know what is going on with you and your life because you always wrote it in invisible ink that's a great idea for a poem and you did an awesome job on it. You are very talented.

keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever. Oooh! and thank you for reading my poems and giving me comments means alot to me =]

I really like the origonal idea of this poem, and the wording was nicly choosen. But the flow was kind of off... And I think it's because you had a shaky slyable count. You might want to work on that and somtimes all it takes is a few words changed here and there! Still an over all wonderful write and I enjoy reading your work SOOOO much! Whenever I have spare time I love to just sit and read your work!

I feel I can read between the lines of this metaphoric message... great poem

Part of this reminded me of the second Harry Potter book... I = lame.

The idea behind the poem is a very interesting one, and the poem flows pretty well through the description of said idea.

Ooh I liked this one. I journal myself, and I'm so afraid of someone reading it...GOOD JOB!!

joy*:.xx

This is a truly touching poem. I love it.. really kinda sad though, but good none-the-less. I think it explains society today, and even a bit of mortality.
Sorry I haven't been in touch with you lately lol. I'm so used to commenting on your poems like every other day and I really looked forward to it! I was thinking the other day, "what's up with Jessy these days?" lol.. as creepy as that may sound, you know what I mean lol. So yeah, I decided to check out some of your poems again. Great job on this one!!

Take Care and God Bless,
Sarah-Joy

This is a truly touching poem. I love it.. really kinda sad though, but good none-the-less. I think it explains society today, and even a bit of mortality.
Sorry I haven't been in touch with you lately lol. I'm so used to commenting on your poems like every other day and I really looked forward to it! I was thinking the other day, "what's up with Jessy these days?" lol.. as creepy as that may sound, you know what I mean lol. So yeah, I decided to check out some of your poems again. Great job on this one!!

Take Care and God Bless,
Sarah-Joy

Oops, double entry, sorry :/

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